The intro was uninspired & dull, try something more innovative & energetic, colourful next time.
The cc was too monotonous, try sticking more to the original colors & contrast them so they look more saturated & more interesting, try not to show that much of a same angle when showing a run up, add more transitions, 'cause it was kinda boring at times, the fade right before the bump was totally unnecessary, don't do that, or at least show the bump with some added color fx or pan/crop movement.
Your edit was really lacking some nice color fx, in conjunction with the dull CC it made it look really boring, the transitions were nice, but try adding more sync effects especially saturated, good looking color effects, to make the vid more variable & interesting.
Overall, it wasn't really bad, you still have a lot to improve on, but it wasn't unwatchable either, it was ok.
